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Re: Audition/Line Critique Thread « Reply #19 on Mar 7, 2010, 9:41pm »
Alright I just recorded some auditions for Goku for Flamingwindjutsu's fandub. I had a lot of fun with the power-up screaming and the Kamehameha at the end! Critique please!
There are three separate takes of the power-up screams, increasing in ferocity, just to clear up any confusion. They aren't supposed to one continuous "line"
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Re: Audition/Line Critique Thread « Reply #21 on Mar 29, 2010, 6:18pm »
I'm trying to do an audition for a flash movie called To the End of the World. http://www.4shared.com/file/252327812/bd....ique_Versi.html I'm trying out for the part of Lyon, a 13 year old kid who's supposed to sound like a "polite, thoughtful smarty-pants."
I definitely think the third line can be improved, but I'm not sure about the rest.
Re: Audition/Line Critique Thread « Reply #22 on May 11, 2010, 11:44pm »
Hey! I posted an Audition for Supreme User on youtube which is directed by CrayZbrawlR, and this is my first audition that i would like feedback for. I'm pretty new, so i'm open to all types of criticism!
I first started with HackA$$, an evil villain that you can't take seriously. I tried getting my voice just a bit lower, but nothing worked out, so i put the pitch a tiny bit lower to get the effect. . I don't think that my audition for HackA$$ was that good, because i'm just a bit self concious about using too much effects that changes my voice a bit too much.
Then i had two Versions of Johnny5, a nerdy robot that just plays smash to see the world of nintendo, and doesn't care about Sega and Konami, so he tends to ignore people who play as snake and sonic. He also think's he's a robot...nerd. For this, i posted two different versions, one with a robotic echo effect, and another without the echo.
So I'd really like some feedback if possible. Thank you!
*waits patiently*
« Last Edit: May 13, 2010, 8:42pm by MimicOfBlitz »
I'm supposed to sound annoyed, like it's final straw.
Advice?
The emotion I hear in there is different than annoyed. I can't think of how to put it into words, but it doesn't sound annoyed. Try this. Zelda is in front of many people as she is about to banish Link. She's not yelling as to continue to look professional in front of her people, however she's on the verge of screaming her head off. If you can picture what's going on, you can act it out (it may help to put on the same emotions on your own face or even use hand movements)
Her shoulders are raised, her eyes are closed, her teeth are clenched, and her hands are fists just begging to kill Link. All that anger is within her, but she has to contain it in front of her people.
When she speaks her voice might be shaky (as she is trying not to scream her head off). I would also say the lines a lot slower. Maybe also start off smaller (quieter) and then build up to 'banished'. Did that help any?
I did this clip for someone I'm doing a voice for.
Does it sound sexy enough? Also, does the blow sound alright? I don't want it to have too much of a PFFFWOOOOOO sound in the mic. D:
I'm in no postion to critque, but I just didn't feel like it was real, It sounded like someone voice acting. Not a living character. It's proably just me though, so don't take my words seriously.
Alright, here is my sample, It's for comick's In The Dark flash cartoon, for the part of sin.
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