Well, I'm glad I've come around so you can get some sleep!
First of all- I love, love your regular speaking voice. Woah. Great quality. Wow. Yes. You have a great radio voice.
ok, now onto business.
Dick Tracy
Tone Quality- It sounds way too airy for me. The producer does want the voice to be low, but he's also looking for some gruff. Add more tone to your voice. Right now it's all breath and no actual vibration of the vocal chords happening. Well, I take that back. There is some sound, but it's mainly a croaking sound. Like that sound from The Grudge.
Pacing- Overall, I felt like this line dragged a lot. Can you pick it up a bit?
Melody- If I were to go to a piano and play the notes that I heard from your voice, it would be mainly the same key, with maybe one or two different pitches, throughout the line. It was pretty monotonous and it all stayed at one volume level. Try to get some contrast.
Character- I like the character. The seriousness in your tone works.
Narrator-
Tone Quality- Awesome tone quality! I loved this one a lot! Great sound here.
Pacing- I loved the pacing. I would just be careful with a few words, such as "officer" and "belong to Tribune media". The words slurred a bit and became a bit unclear. The rest of it was very well done though.
Melody- Loved it. You made the line very interesting. Your ascending and descending lines were very well done and pleasing to the ear.
Character- Greatness.
This is a wonderful audition here.
Pat Patton
Tone Quality- Again, great quality.
Pacing- Good pacing. It didn't drag.
Melody- In this sample you had three different phrases. All three phrases sounded the same to me. The way you ascended and descended happened exactly the same way in all three phrases. You need these three phrases to sound different somehow. I would also suggest trying to connect more. It sounds like three different lines that don't have anything to do with each other.
Character- Great accent and sound. You've got a great character here once you can get the above worked out.
Monologue- Great articulation. Love it. Can never get enough of it.
Quality: Great.
Pacing: It's almost dragging. Not all the way, but it's on the border line.
Melody: Almost the same thing as Pat above. You have all of these different phrases with a certain melody. The way you say each line is different from the rest with one exception: the beginning. The beginning of each line sounds the same and is probably adding onto that sense of almost dragging. Also, again, these phrases are becoming unconnected. It's good when you have the pauses so you can separate each character, but there are pauses within your descriptions, making what you say about this individual a bit unconnected.
Character- I really like this character. You seem almost mysterious and it adds a lot to what you're reading.
EDIT: Sorry! Ignore the crossed out section. I just went and read your other post in the New Members Section.
Ok, now for technical stuff.
Are you using a head mic? If so, start saving up for a better mic. It's really hurting your performance. If not, you may be too close to your mic.
There are puffs of air intruding and disrupting the show.
Also, where are you recording? I hear some echoes going on. Can you find a smaller room to record in? Ideally, you want to record in a smaller sized room that has carpeting and not a high ceiling.
I think I can also hear where you are editing your lines. Every now and then I hear a clip or a pop or the sound just suddenly stops. Watch out for that.
First timer?! Really?
Great job. Bravo! You are onto a great start. I'm impressed!
If you have any questions about what I said, don't be afraid to PM me or something.
